Overall Reaction to Reviews

Hi,

So, I've gotten all the reactions back from all people (two students, plus Ackley).

In general, I think that they provide some key insights, and give inklings of suggestions to improve the overall proposal.  I also feel like some people missed important and clearly obvious sections of the proposal, or were unnecessarily rude.

This aside, in sum, here are the (major) things that will be addressed in the final revision of the proposal:

• Story: The story was truly intended to be open-ended, so that everyone in the team can share in making it awesome.  I VERY DELIBERATELY did NOT specify what the story would be, so that we'd all be able to work on it.  However, this point needs to be made much more clearly.  Every reviewer commented on this.
• Missing Sections: The proposal has several missing sections, such as stakeholder identification and budget.  These must and will be added.
• Consistency and Flow: The proposal is sometimes redundant and inconsistent.  Personally, I feel like the entire thing reads like a hippie's rant--disillusioned and illogical.  Other reviewers also noted that the proposal is often redundant.

Ian